I like the way this alludes to MJ. I was wondering if you maybe meant happen not happens for the last word. I think this could be a great final presentation if you had a neat visual and maybe added a few haikus. It could work really well!
love this poem its short but says so much. i think by itself is fine because it is very powerful.
Nice haiku. It seems like it could be converted into an ad/commercial. I like the simplicity yet powerful choice of words.
Poignant and clever.I am curious, though: what do you mean by 'where odd is not quite even"?
I like the way this alludes to MJ. I was wondering if you maybe meant happen not happens for the last word. I think this could be a great final presentation if you had a neat visual and maybe added a few haikus. It could work really well!
ReplyDeletelove this poem its short but says so much. i think by itself is fine because it is very powerful.
ReplyDeleteNice haiku. It seems like it could be converted into an ad/commercial. I like the simplicity yet powerful choice of words.
ReplyDeletePoignant and clever.
ReplyDeleteI am curious, though: what do you mean by 'where odd is not quite even"?